Jam Cruise edit 3

So the people at wikipedia still believe my article is kinda biased and reads kinda like an advertisement.

Guess its hard not to write so positively about something that is life changing and shows you that there are still level minded crazies out there somewhere jamming on the ocean...

I have just been talkling on the talk page to the admin guy, but he hasnt written any comments.

I got the inspiration for my re-edit from my good friend who is an under-cover brother from another mother.....Keith Nemzer .

Check out his input.. Great guy.

Here is my edit for Jam Cruise.

Jam Cruise: An unrivaled music and sensory experience at sea.
Jam Cruise is the newest addition to the plethora of music based festivals followed by fans everywhere. Like the Festival Express, Jam Cruise is an innovative event which hosts a variety of the generation's most compelling and jam-based musical artists in motion. The artists on the Festival Express played music from morning until night throughout their ride on a train. The artists on Jam Cruise play music from morning until night while out at sea.
Since January 6, 2004, Jam Cruise has sailed for five different voyages, creating a culture of criusers like no other. The boat is your family at sea, and this family has a strong connection, returning year after year. One may run into and mingle with any number of famous musicians throughout the journey. The artists are humble and return year after year to sit and play some music for you.
Musicians from previous cruises include artists such as Bela Fleck and the Flecktones, Yonder Mountain String Band, Les Claypool, Particle, and the list goes on. The performers on the boat are passengers just like everyone else. The passangers on the boat are performers just like everyone else. Performances on the boat include The Everyone Orchestra, in which all of the passangers participate in making music through beating, clapping, harmonizing, and yelling "YES....NO!"; The Disco, for a DJ; the Theater for an intimate performance; and Pool-deck jams which play through out the day, long into the night.